Published August 4, 2009
After All This Time
Why are you still here
So fresh in my mind
How can I feel this
After all this time
Night after night
You’re in my dreams
And with me everyday
Haunting my memories
Every time,
Its always the same
Touching, and kissing
Blood racing through my veins
Then all too soon
I awake in my bed
Alone and without you
With only the memories in my head
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Wow, I really loved the ending. I felt swept up by it all, very nice. The end almost made me think about that song of Slipknot, Dead Memories in my head. I don't know a alot about rythm and rhyme but I like it. I do feel that the first paragraph is not as good as the last one, I'm not really sure why, maybe the word choice. But nice, good and down to the point.
this is so lovely. I can't find anything wrong with it so I'm just going to tell you how much I loved it.
it's so sweet and it's written in a way that people can relate to.
I think it's beautifully written. PM me if you write any more
xxxx